Translation Check by Chrouya
Script: Zombie OVA 2.ass
Workraw: Koreha Zombie Desuka? Of The Dead 00 [OVA] (DVD 720x480 x264 10 bit AAC) [34678463].mp4

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*NOTE: NESSIE IS A NICKNAME OF THE LOCH NESS MONSTER!*

2
It's been a while, everyone. {or Long time no see, everyone.}
Everyone, long time no see.
*god, it feels weird to TLC your own lines once again.*

4
{empty}
We apologize for the inconvenience at the time.
*Formal sentence*

7
As you can see, we are all doing fine.
As you can see, we are all doing fine, and?
*he got cut off*

10
There's nothing to look here!
There's nothing to see here!
*deliberately looking --> seeing*
*maybe I got the context wrong: "This ain't something for you to see!" is also possible.*

14
{empty}
You're quite the amazing damn bug, I see.
*as followed by the next line*

20
{empty}
Please stop grinning, your loathsomeness will reach a critical point.
*kimochiwarusa...Disgustingness,abhorrentness, w/e*
*creepiness is a nice alternative*


23
We will soon be heading to the pool, so we'll-
You will now be shown a story from that time, so?
*it's a story from the past. Maybe edit this sentence*

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Secret Sword Technique: "Turning Swallow Cut"! {or ["Tsubamegaishi" secret sword technique!] whichever is preferred}
Secret Sword Technique "Turning Swallow Cut"! {or Secret Sword Technique "Tsubamegaeshi"!}
*without the colon*

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Going to the pool is really a great idea!
A pool should indeed stay indoors!
*He means a pool is best when it's indoors*

44
Sure.
Genius.
*anderson does speak a lot of english. Maybe it IS something like sure. OR, it's Japanese and he's saying shun == genius.*
*or he's just an idiot. Keep using Sure I guess.*

45
In a girl's world, their backs are also considered as their breasts.
In a girl's world, their backs are also considered as breasts.
*maybe?*

56
What's wrong with that Ayumu?!
What's wrong with that Stupid Ayumu?!
*I'm not sure if we use the "bayumu = baka ayumu = stupid ayumu" in Hatsuyuki's version.*

58
{I don't know. She asks for a Large size ice cream sort}
*She's making up words, much to the dismay of the TLs. Even the clerk says Huh? to it. My guess is that she's ordering a large version of that ice cream on display.
I'd like a large cone of this Parte Caramel with Gem Palantina topping, please.
*It's something like this, but just not sure about the capitalized words. Not that it matters.*


60
{\fad(0,500)}Eu!!
{\fad(0,500)}Yuu!!
*and again.*

68
That Sera. She sure has one hell of a body.
That Sera, having such a sinful body.
*literal tl*

74
D-Do you prefer smaller breast, Aikawa?
Aikawa, d-do you prefer smaller breasts?
*matching her sentence order. Also, breasts is plural in the case of them melons. *

79
Why did you do that for, Haruna?!
Haruna! What was that for?!
*same as above.*

88
{sign}
{sign}Exciting urban legend

96
Stop saying such things.
Stop saying such unscientific things.
*implying false belief*

109
I've got hold of the target!
I've gotten hold of the target!

122
Shit! {or Oh no!}
Shit! 
*because we can. And more fitting as well!*

127
Can I get you... to rub oil on me? {Could you please rub oil on me}
Could you please rub some oil on me?
*This sounds like english.*

148
Oh no! Haruna will...
Oh no! Those two will...
*he does plurify Haruna, which implies Haruna et al. (i.e. those two, simply)*

149
???????????????????????????
*Sorry editor; even I lost my options here. I have absolutely no idea what he's saying. I guess we could go for a liberal translation. Some hints:
odaku = pollution/corruption (I believe this is one of the words)
oudaku = consent/assent 
*Hadena (derp) says "They're still at it?!", but that's a pure guesslation.*

153
It seems like I'm not a good enough woman to Ayumu.
It seems like I'm nothing but a convenient woman to Ayumu.
*It has a negative context*

161
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You damn bug, swarming around watermelon rinds, kicked by donkeys.

162
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Dance like a moth and sink like a cicada!
*it's a Japanese expression (ga no you ni mai semi no you ni shininasai)*

201
to use thumbtacks;
to step on thumbtacks;
*because that always happens. True story.*

225
Eh?! We're going to have a party?!
Eh?! Are we invited for the party?!
*It's not the party that surprises them, it's the fact they're being invited.*

227
The last time I went to a birthday party was when I was still in kindergarten.
The last time I went to a birthday party was around kindergarten.
*Make this sentence shorter, too little time*

246
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Don't even try to steal them.
*gameru is hokkaido dialect. Someone should've told me...No wonder I couldn't find it in my dictionaries.*

247
{}
I wasn't planning to, anyway.
*literally "I won't steal them, anyway."*

252
It would be great if Eu is happy about it.
I hope Yuu will be delighted.
*style fix*

256
What do you want to eat, Eu?
What do you want to eat tonight, Yuu?
*omission of tonight*

264
It's the eternal mille-feuille of the darkest hell, Onii-chan! {TLC}
It's a hotpot containing endlessly piled up mille-feuille of the darkest hells, Onii-chan!
*it missed some words*

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{sign}{Welcome to　"ヤカクオフキョフ"?}
{sign}Welcome to the Rattling House of Fear
*so much typos in this sign...it's written in full katakana like "werukome tu zo yanari obu kyoofu"

287
I shall flatten you into a Caravel!
I shall flatten you into caramel!
*it's kyarameru*

297
the silver rope or the brown rope?
the silver rope or the bronze rope?
*銅 is bronze.*

336
{sign} {TLC} Bust UP {...}Boing X
{sign} Bust UP, weight DOWN {sign, as well as being said by Orito} Boing X
*it says something with mass, so I'm assuming weight decrease. Not sure, but the whole sign doesn't make sense.*

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{sign}Boat Kelp (Large size, good for one year)
{sign}Battera Kombu (Large size, one year's worth) {If necessary, the red sign means Special(特撰)}
*Battera Kombu is edible mackerel kelp. Keep it to "Japanese kelp", maybe?*

340
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Tada! One year's worth of what looks like some filter with mackerel or something to it.

341
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Alright, I guess that works.
*yayauke is bastardization of bakauke, which is slang. Meaning someone is "satisfied with the unexpected".
*not sure if I got the context right*

351
Bad luck is inescapable to people.
Bad luck is inevitable to people.
*maybe?*